I thought id pass a few comments on your draft,
im not too keen on the delay on the guitar at the beginning, it sounds a bit out of time, i quite like the chorus on the lead riff guitar, maybe just tone it down a bit, the drums need some work, theres quite a nasty "thwack" from the snare and they dont sit together particularly well, i like the vocal sound youve got on this, nothing fancy with it but it does cut through, and of course theres some balancing between the various instruments that needs addressing, but of course i appreciate its a draft, it would be good to hear your final.
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