I just finished my first Logic song and I would love to hear some opinions on it. I'm open to constructive criticism, so I'd really appreciate it if you could leave some suggestions for future improvement.
It's a song for a contest ("Bleeding Fingers Contest", ), where participants are asked to create a recomposition of the song "Destiny's Door" by Hans Zimmer. I tried to keep close to the original style (with some new stylistic elements) and create a continuation of the theme. The first 4 bars of the melody are from Hans Zimmer himself (with some counterpoint by me), the rest is self-composed.
And, for comparison, the original:
If you like it, please vote for it.