When It's Wrong, some feedback bitte

[sayenex]

Hey Everyone, my first entry into the Listening Booth, so please be kind.

 

I'm trying to get as close as I can to a finished version of this song, so I know some of you have good monitors out there, any feedback would be very helpful. The ending isn't finished because it's going to merge into another song.

 

This song is a lot different than the style I usually play, it started out with just fooling around with software instruments and stuff, and kind of evolved into this:

 

http://www.fizzgigonline.com/mp3/When%20It's%20Wrong.mp3

 

If someone could tell me the code for posting mp3 url's that would also be helpful. I tried using the "URL" button up top, but you can see the results above.

 

thanks again,

 

Evan